Review My Domain Landing Page

[mr-x]

I've created a landing page and would like your feedback, suggestions.

1) I need help with the sales pitch, benefits of buying a decent domain name.

2) Is page flow / structure OK?

https://www.floridarvcenter.com/
https://www.seattlerv.com/

FYI, RV is short for "recreational vehicle", i.e. 5th wheels, campers, motorhomes, etc.

 

[Bob]

I like the landing pages. Crisp, not cluttered, and to the point. And, you give two payment options. Pretty cool.

Did you make this design yourself or did you "acquire" it from somewhere?

 

[Bob]

Oh - and the pages are responsive. +1 for that.

 

[Johnn]

Need to add Escrow option.
Too many scams out there and no one would send you the money if they don't know you.

 

[mr-x]

Oh - and the pages are responsive. +1 for that.

Thanks.

Stole idea from HugeDomains.com. Used a layout from purecss.io.

 

[mr-x]

Need to add Escrow option.
Too many scams out there and no one would send you the money if they don't know you.

Good idea. Thanks.

 

[BobDiGiTaL]

mad spelling errors,.

 

[mr-x]

mad spelling errors,.

Thanks! I found 3 ( on both pages ).

 

[BobDiGiTaL]

replace "Own This Domain Today" with "for only $1499.00"
add "You'll" before "Take"
add "We can easily" before "transfer" and replace "domain" with 'FloridaRVCenter.com'
add "only" before "12"
replace "your" with "you're" before "explaining"
"LOOSING" only has one "O"
replace "is approved" to "has been processed"

Maybe remove from both locations,
"Annual renewal fee for .com domains is approx. $15, paid to the registrar of your choice."

I like the beach scene, but I think your colors are off. Red is an impulse buy color and so is blue.
Green is for thrifty or cheap buyers. so maybe your colors should be switched.

Do you own AcmeDomains.com ?

 

[azanmi]

Straight CSS, fast pageload and compelling pitch I like it